Flooded (Spintunes 3 round 4 shadow)

Flooded

Flooded

would I believe you, should you say
I used to be so pretty
I used to send the sunglight back
And blind the gathered crowd

I was so smooth and spotless
And no one was so thoughtless
no cold, uncaring complaints
or applause for who was loudest

if I’m so easy to discard
well then I’m glad the hard part’s over
these shadows shake and grow so large
stretch across the grass and clover

it’s just like they always said
the love you felt, it’s in your head
they’ll find something else to care about
this bitter nectar I was fed
a grave, displayed is where it lead
gutted by whispers and doubt
just rusted and flooded out

would you believe me if I said
that I deserve better
god knows that I’m not perfect
but I shouldn’t be dismissed

you were so sure and steady
I guess I wasn’t ready
for such callousness, indifference
to be proven to exist

so it seems that in some spotlights
though I was blinded, you lost sight
of the benefit of doubt
of just a bit of empathy

it’s just like they always said
the love you felt, it’s in your head
they’ll find something else to care about
this bitter nectar I was fed
a grave displayed is where it lead
gutted by whispers and doubt
just rusted and flooded out

I lose
a coat of paint and means to begin
I lose
my voice cracks just like paper crumbling
I lose
a coat of paint, my lights slowly dim
I lose
I’ll never move from this spot again

if I’m so easily abandoned
at least I cease to be your fixture
with any luck, this ugly scene
turns out to make a pretty picture

it’s just like they always said
the love you felt, it’s in your head
they’ll find something else to care about
this bitter nectar I was fed
a grave, displayed is where it lead
gutted by whispers and doubt

just like you, avoiding blame
responsibility or shame
I need something else to care about
these wheels will never turn again
life disappeared around the bend
but until I can work that out
I’m just rusted, and flooded out

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2 comments so far

  1. rockingjamboree on

    It’s nice. Not specific to anyone. But if feels Amy Winehouse inspired. Maybe that’s an obvious thing to say today. But somebody finding these words on the Internet a few years from now might not make that connection. They will think I’m profound.

    Looking forward to hearing the melody, hearing the song. Be well and rock on.

    • theedgeofcynicism on

      Yeah, it’s definitely a little Amy-inspired. That’s been on my mind so there wasn’t much avoiding it. However this is actually a Spintunes shadow…..

      If it was an official entry I’d be worried that the connection to the challenge might be construed as too lose. Happily, it’s a shadow and most judges haven’t been reviewing them anyway, so I don’t have to care. 😉


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